Great stuff, thanks for sharing!

I like unexpected twist and you certainly did delivery that. Great story.

Another really great story dailyshorts, enjoyed this.

Tom Baker Thanks Tom for the compliment and the visit.

dailyshorts Great story!

dailyshorts I thoroughly enjoyed this ! Very creepy and lots of unanswered questions!

Sam Woolfe Thanks for the Staff Picks recommendation.  I really appreciate it.

I want to recommend this for Staff Picks

Many thanks for reading, Tom. Or should I say, Doctor?

Great stuff SueWrite, definitely recommending this for Staff Picks

Many thanks, Lianne and Pia. Your comments are very much appreciated!

Thank you again for the comments, Hannah Marie. I will return the favour as soon as I have time to concentrate.

Very good, I'll second that recommendation if it's not too late.

Great characters and a dramatic story HopelessRomantic

Great, dramatic story HopelessRomantic. Very realistic and engaging dialogue and interior narration.

Absolutely captivating piece done so through intensity and truth! fantastic!

A great write! The intensity of this story gripped me from beginning to end! I really enjoyed reading this one. =)

This is great, really enjoyed how truthful it was.

Intense! I loved it.

Wasn't expecting that twist. Beautifully written story A.J. Simons. Great stuff!

Great twist and even greater story. Nicely done!

Thanks guys. your comments are very much appreciated.

Agree with DL3, you pulled off the twist really well, wasn't expecting it! Good job.

This is brilliant! Can really relate to the the emotions. Loving the scottish dialect as well! Absolutely loved the twist.

I enjoyed this and thought it was very well written. I thought the characters are believable too.

Nice work! This is really well written and I'll look forward to reading your other stuff.

Great characters Victor Redman, what inspired this?

Very gripping and cleverly written - thanks for sharing!

This is a great short story, I found it clever the way the guy hides his madness from his psychiatrist.

AndWhenIDie and Robin Lord Thanks for the feedback

snuflower Thank you :)

this was a very well written story! great job!! :D

Eversea You're absolutely welcome, and thank you for taking the time to comment :)

NBS Thank you :)

A very good story, I enjoyed reading it. Well done!

Amber Meyer Thank you. I do sometimes write happy stories (but very rarely!) ;) x

Beautiful story, but it's so sad!

Leah Gray Thank you so much, I always enjoy hearing when one of my stories has touched someone :)

Jenny-Rose Thank you very much, and your comments are really appreciated :)

Tom Baker Thanks so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

Sheepyblue Thank you :) All fixed now, thanks for letting me know :)

Sabine Shah Thanks for reading my story Sabine and your kind comments!

Tom Benson thanks Tom, I've altered pencil to pen!

What a very sweet story!

Lovely and poetic story, Georgina Green!

This was a great story . The last diary entry was my favourite and I also thought the shifting point of view worked well.

I really enjoyed reading this. So chilling and suspenseful. Truly a great read! :)

The shifting point of view works really well Stephanie Ellis, nicely done

This was a great little vignette. It really captures the mood. I'm recommending it for Staff Picks .

Interesting read. Had an almost documentary feel to it.

Really enjoyed this, thanks for sharing! Quite a dark side to some seemingly normal kids!

Loved it ! is there going to be a second chapter or so ? :)

@[writergeorge](:2549) writergeorgeThanks Writergeorge, so glad you liked it.

Very good story well written

Thanks so much Doceft. That makes a lot of difference to me. doceft

An interesting look into a culture I may never experience. By the way, you write very well.

A.J. Simons Jhumpa is indeed very good. Thanks

Miko 72 A very great compliment indeed. Thanks.

kateannejack Thanks so much for your appreciation Kateannejack

An excellent little story, full of great description, narrative and dialogue.

It feels like I've traveled halfway across the globe and found this nice piece, Great story!

Lakshmi Raj Sharma Hey will you please get it kinda longer, cuz I love this!!

K.R.Chaitra Thanks K.R. so good of you to say so.

aww, sir!!
that's superb story and that's good to know that this story is the story of week...
such a nice discription!!!!!

Caleb Mason Thanks Caleb for giving authors so much encouragement and opportunity.

Shara Vega Thanks Shara for your kindness

Sabine Shah Thanks Sabine. Will definitely do that. Shukriya

Bohat khub Sharma ji! It is very well-written and flows with ease. Aur bhi kutch lagaeeye ga. Intizar rahe ga.

Very well written. Learnt a lot from this.

Love this story and all the others in the collection. Congratulations Professor Sharma.

Great writing Lakshmi Raj Sharma

i loved reading this. it really got me hooked. i'm recommending it for Staff Picks .

Great story Stephen Leather!

Entertaining and satirical view of religion, loved the ending with the young con men.

Interesting satire Adriaan Brae, you have thought this through really well. Great work.

Great writing Adriaan Brae, I like your idea and very much enjoyed reading this.

Great piece subtly assembled with just enough detail for the setting. We "ancients" love to consume farce on bad terms blindly.

clever idea!

Nice piece of comedic sci-fi Adriaan Brae. Please share more!

I enjoyed this! I love a bit of satire/dark comedy so I'm recommending this one for Staff Picks

Alessa thanks a bunch! :)

Thanks Robin Lord! I'll definitely look into it while re-editing! :)

Tom Baker haha whoops, I forgot to type my reply. Thank you for your comment! I love getting them :)

Tom Baker

Beautiful writing. :)

Nice start Mischief

Joey T That's so cool, thanks for letting me know! :)

Very easy to relate to - we've all been there! Thanks for sharing your perspective Mischief !

loved it i think i might be hooked will read the others for sure really like soloman pace

Tom Baker Thank you, glad you enjoyed the story.

Joey T Thank you : )

Fantastic stuff Alan Scott

Ah just read the synopsis - sorry for inane question. Will definitely check this series out Alan.

This story is awesome! I think Pace is a great lead character. Is there more? Would love to see this turned into a novel

Really gripping stuff Alan Scott - thank you for sharing these stories!

I loved this. Very condensed but very effective. I'm recommending it for Staff Picks .

An interesting piece of writing Ian Gregson. I enjoyed reading this.

What a great short piece you've written, Ian. I enjoyed this immensely.

This is very well written and very touching. I liked it!

Very intelligent writing, especially for such a short story. Thanks Ian Gregson !

Miko 72 Many thanks for appreciating.

I was a bit lost with the settings but it is a great story!

This is excellent Sabine Shah, you're really growing as a writer and it's a joy to watch!

nicolejess Many thanks. Glad you liked it.

Raoul25 Thanks for your kind words.

KateDaniela Bless you.

Great read. Captured me right away!

Well recommended Joey T - a great read!

This piece of writing really moved me. I could see this as a longer story - maybe even a book one day. Well done!

Very emotional and heartfelt! I'll recommend this for Staff Picks!

Loved it! Wonderful :)

That fish market stare was what I always thought my girls gave me when I talked to them about taking care of THEMSELVES.

Thank you so very much! Maciej_Rajk

Thanks so much Kate! I appreciate that so much! KateDaniela

Thank you so much Sabine! Sabine Shah

Thank you! And thank you for noticing that! Sheepyblue

Thanks so much for the recommendation Joey! Joey T

Trevor! The EIC at my first publisher told me I had a fear of punctuation, LOL! TrevorS

Works really well P.I. Barrington, great ending as well

Quality over quantity. The metaphor in the end is creatively done. Kudos!

Thanks so much Jacque!! I so love it when people like what I've written!

I loved it! Great job!

A story well told. I esp like the ending.

I'll reformat and republish thanks so much Joey!!

The formatting has been messed up slightly but still a decent read, thank you!

A really good story that left me wanting more

The way that this story was told was really touching...I think some tears had escaped in the midst of reading it. I loved it. <3

Hannah Marie You are too kind; thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

jeff mantel This was a spur of the moment thing; I doubt I will be elaborating further. :)

Wonderful story!

A good short story

Very nice short story. I enjoyed it.

It's a tsundere story all right!

Needs a cover pic, but the story itself is pretty good. Probably worth a Staff Picks recommendation!

I'm definitely intrigued - even though this is a prologue I like that we're thrown into the middle of things.

Claire LeBear , it took a couple of readings (I'm kinda slow that way). But I got it. Well done!

Some lovely turns of phrase in this Claire LeBear

jeff mantel There's more where that came from. :) Thank you for the compliment!

Interesting start Claire LeBear, very well written, interested to see where it goes

One type at the end of page 2 - she 'smile' along, instead of she smiled alone? (I dunno)

Agreed. Well presented and definitely worth a second read. Well done!

PeteThinks Wow! Thank you so much for the kind words! It really means a lot to me. :)

Thanks, John Paul!

This was a really nice read. I'm recommending it for Staff Picks . It made me smile.

Thanks, Jeff!

Interesting story, entertaining and well written.

It's great, front page material indeed. Thanks for sharing!

Cover photo by William Murphy (http://www.flickr.com/photos/infomatique/)