I enjoyed seeing the humanism of God in this piece, very much a familiar paterfamilias.

E.Van Johnson Thank you.

I love originality and you have it here in spades. Many thanks for a fresh look at tricky subject.

Great short story, very enjoyable!

Redheaded_Dancer Thank you.

Love this! Short and sweet but gets the punch across :) really makes the reader think about the world they live in, well done

Recommended Staff Picks ! :-)

Christina Ar Thank you!

I'd like to recommend this story Staff Picks !

Haha!  Lovit.  Jasmine Rose would approve ;-)

Thanks, Steve. Sorry about that.

I like this, but want it to continue.

I really enjoyed reading this and I loved the twist at the end.

so that's what quality creative writing looks like.  I have much to learn....

Absolutely loved it ! :)

Read through the entire thing twice, just couldn't get enough. Great rhythm to your writing.

Thanks Matthew and Christina!

A wonderfully nuanced, evocative, suspenseful and mesmerising piece of work Mister T! Truly engaging, thank you.

Congratulations T. Alex Miller you're ReadWave's Short Story of the day over on Facebook!

Awesome. I love this story. One my all time favourites.

T. Alex Miller congrats on being included in our Staff Picks section!

Really enjoyed the world you created and your writing style- feel like it needed a more dramatic conclusion though.

well written an charming...with just the right amount of humor.

Thanks for all your comments.

Realistic, believable and well written. It reminds me of Mink Elliot's novels. Well done!

Realistic and emotive, yet comical at the right times! Liked the characterisation of Pete particularly.

Thank you. It's not autobiographical - though elements are drawn from my own experience.

Very accomplished. It reads so true that I want to think its autobiographical.

Many thanks, Sam and Alexandra!

Love how the pace builds at the end. Fantastic piece of writing here, congrats!

Thanks, Raoul!

I really enjoyed this, thanks SueWrite!

Thank you, Rupinder, Raoul and MagicWords!

Wow, the tension in this was great! Very descriptive and realistic! Great work!

SueWrite congrats on being included in the Staff Picks section!

Terrific story! I felt myself suffocating under the mothers scrutiny as I read - you've really brought this story to life.

Yes, she was. She managed to stop her elder son ever leaving home!

Well, I only hope she wasn't as territorial about your husband, as Joan is about 'Dan' :)

The point of view is very interesting...Please continue this (:

Thanks for your feedback on my story 'my morbid wife', Shirley :)

Thanks very much, Raoul :)

Congrats on being included in our Staff Picks section Nathan Braund!

Thank you for your interesting feedback, June. If you'd like to read more of my work, please visit www.nathanbraund.com.

Thanks very much, Christina :)

Really enjoyed this. Was entertaining, yet covered important issues at the same time.

Great bit of culture shock, enjoyably surreal slice-of-life! Speech is spot on

Jack Durish congrats on being included in our Staff Picks section!

Funny and well written. Great characterisation.

Hilarious!

Really funny. Enjoyed it immensely.

Interesting story, at time comical. Very well written.

Nice. Very pulp fiction (but I'll bet you're British--Yanks never say 'bedsit'.)

Wonderful story, great job!

Congrats on being included in our Staff Picks section Steve Aldous!

Haha. Totally old school. More Mickey Spillane, than Raymond Chandler.

Halilou styzle Thanks, glad you like it

Interesting story, I like it :)

Sabine Shah Thanks

Sheepyblue Makes brief and exact sense. Good job.

Alexandra Neon Thank you, glad you enjoyed it

Very nicely written.  I also am having trouble replying to comments, so thank you very much for the one you left.

Melanie Jean Juneau Thank you ;D

love your British dry wit and understated humour

Christina Ar Thank you ;D,

I like the chatty, informal writing style, and the characters too. Could go somewhere interesting!

Frangipani Thank you ;D

Robert Tucker Thanks, I will try to rework the ending soon ;D

Paramitha Thank you ;D

I recommend this to the Staff Picks section!

Wow! Thank you Raoul. I'm very flattered.

Congrats on being included in our Staff Picks section Jenny Twist  Amazon: amazon.com/author/j

Sorry, still not got the hang of it! Thanks Matthew. I thought I'd put something new up every week. Love Jenny xxxx

Thanks, Jade. So pleased to meet you Love Jenny xxx

Ahh I loved this! you have written it so well, look forward to reading more!

I really really really enjoyed this story! Please post more, you're a great writer!

haha the ending was great! Poor guy...

Meant to say - best line: She was a goddess and he was a goat.

This is funny! Love it!

Ashwin Shanker Thanks!

Awesome story .. Great dialogues ... #staffpicks ..

Excellent Staff Picks

This is wonderful. I love how relatable/realistic this is, and I love the ending, made me laugh. XD Very well done!

I loved the ending.  Good story.

Going up on Staff Picks now Bryan Costales

Thanks  Robert Tucker, I tweaked the ending per your feedback and fixed the two typos.

I hope this rewrite solves some of the problems listed below. I focused in this draft at bringing the emotional tone to the forefront.

This is fantastic!

I love this!!!

Thank you all very much for your comments and your "likes." Much appreciated!

Lovely dialog!

I recommend this to the Staff Picks section.

Thank you all for reading and liking my story! You made my day!

Simply fantastic - please keep writing for ReadWave!

I really enjoyed your dialogue and thought you conveyed their dialect really well =)

You had my attention throughout, a truly creepy and lively story. Great writing too.

Really interesting, I look at my fish tank in a different way now, great cover art too

Very entertaining short. Really liked the setup and climax and how you portrayed the school. - Sebastian

Entertaining and weird! Thanks for the read.

I recommend this to the Staff Picks section.

An excellent short story. I wouldn't change a word.
And the cover art is great as well. Really eye-catching.

Creepy yet an amazing story! It seems like it's becoming a cycle now if the cat might be next to get her...

This was pretty creepy in a good way, quite clever as well as I didn't figure out what was going to happen

Fantastic!

This story is great!  So original and funny, I really enjoyed it.

This was incredibly funny! The story flowed well and I enjoyed it a lot :)

Fantastically written!! Comedy at its best!! Absolutely loved this!!!

Hilarious! I love this kind of humour.

Well we can't all write as well as you, Sally ... thankfully ;-)

Worse... ;-)

It's all your fault Sally, you got me started, even if I had to show you how to link your tales on Facebook!

Rockin Richie Batchelor  See what you started?

My first ever story is going to be recommended?!  Woohoo, you have made my day :)

Great story - I'd like to recommend for Staff Picks

Haha. The story is hilarious. Laughed out loud at least three times.

Right i'll log off, big hairy balls to this.....

Really great writing here, love your use of language! I agree a bit with @nicola about the proof reading but great besides that

Half not hal, Doh

Hal a tin of soup is never enough.. unblock me on the pof thing you keep emailing but i can't email back, idiot : ).

Thank you Nikki, you are right.  I am guessing that you have the appropriate editorial skills that I require?

You are too kind Miss Sally.

Alexandra Neon, he's good as gold is dear George, isn't he? Yes dear!

Thanks Maciej!

Cheers Robert, glad you enjoyed it.  I've fixed those typo's, although I'm sure there will be more!

Cheers Robert, glad you enjoyed it.  I've fixed those typo's, although I'm sure there will be more!

I found a few typos
p.1 “Doesn't it looks super, Gary
p.5 - His mum, had laid out the his outfit
Otherwise great story

thank you Nicky for your psychic comments.  I hear you loud and clear.

Another great one! Recommend to Staff Picks.

I can't write like Dan Brown, fortunately, nor have I managed to write a vampire themed teen-romance... but I might try!

Yes, it's natural sounding.  Is there nothing you cannot do?

Woah! *faints*

Well written, entertaining story Deb E Howell, have you more to share?

Thank you, Karen Lynne Klink  (o:

What fun—and a happy ending!

Wow. Thanks Robert Tucker !

Thanks guys. Really appreciate your comments.

I also recommend this for Staff Picks

Loved the format of this piece, humorous and well executed! Enough said :)

This story made me smile and laugh in many places. Congrats for creating such a funny story!

Staff Picks

Like this very much! Great work and very funny :D

Hi Greg, thanks very much! Nope, I meant "carers" - translation in American is caregiver (the story is written in British English).

Thanks so much Catherine and Palak, I'm glad you enjoyed Marjorie! I do love her :-)

P.S. A little concerned about the spelling of 'Theresa' I believe it should be 'Teresa'.

Thanks so much Tom! I've been told that to get inside the heads of women, men should read chick lit :-)

A Humorous short! Well executed!

Something we all dread - that moment when your bladders about to burst and it does!  Ach!  A well written short story.

Haha this is brilliant!

Nice.

Nicely written. A little impression.

Nice work.  I would write more ... but I've got to go ... .

That was weirdly funny. I kind of needed something more though. Nice job!

Haha funny! I really liked that the little girl was smiling.

This is a really funny story. I recommend this to Staff Picks.

Thank you for this, really enjoyed it - clever title, too! Loved everything really, specially the dialogue.

I enjoyed reading this. Another great story!

This was a really well written story. The couch was a pretty good device.

I really enjoyed this, particularly the use of the same brown sofa.  Very nice.

good story, like your flow

Loved the ending and the link with the 'same brown sofa'.  A good story well told.  I like your writing style.

A joy to read.  Wonderfully thought out, even the title. Story of the Week indeed!

Jon I love your FREE stuff!!

Really liked the story. How is it comedy though?

Is there more to this story ??? there better be, coz its awesome .... keep writing bro..

This was a very interesting story, and very well written.

This was wonderful, I enjoyed it very much.

Tom, thanks for the recommendation on paragraph length. Dylan, I appreciate the positive feedback.