Thanks for sharing this - haven't read the other 2 chapters yet, but I'll make sure I do (think I may have spoiled it for myself...)

Tamsin Emma ; Thank you!

Enjoyed this, funny and lighthearted. Good stuff Mike Stevens.

jeff mantel Thanks Jeff; so I can put you down for a 100 pound bag then?

Very witty Mike Stevens, I would certainly buy some

Interesting concept, Melanie Jean Juneau, and lovely story too!

jeff mantel thank-you

Hannah Marie not sure how that anaology popped into my head but it works!

Most amusing and relatable Melanie Jean Juneau

I think it could be cut down a little bit (maybe down to 6 or 7 pages), but it's a great story with great potential. Thank you for sharing.

Hannah Marie Yay! Thanks for your comment! Glad you liked my story :)

Amusing story, I enjoyed it

Quirky and funny little story. I love the off-beat humour in this!

A fine, dramatic ending to the story Meg Lorraine. What do you have in mind now that it is finished?

Hannah Marie ; Thanks Hannah, and I seem to be particularly susceptible to 'foot-in-mouth disease'

jeff mantel ; Thanks Jeff!

Interesting thoughts, well explored Mike Stevens

Jenny-Rose ; Thank you Jenny-Rose!

Christina Ar Thank you Christina!

Great, amusing narrative voice RedX90, but the formatting makes it a little difficult to read

Humorous story RedX90, there are some witty observations here. Great stuff.

Some really funny moments in this - especially his attempts of cooking hungover.

Funny story, RedX90; I really like your biting and humorous tone!

haha great story.

jeff mantel ; Thanks for the tip; I'll be sure to check it out!

KateDaniela ; Thank you!

Interesting idea to make the poem about breaking news and not actually give us the news. Look forward to reading more.

Must be Sky News you are referring to! :)

Very odd Halilou styzle

Loved the story! It has such an off-beat sense of humour that is rare in prose. Keep it up!

Absolutely crazy story. I love it!

Haha, a very funny short story. Well done!

Amazing concept. I just love the story. I remember having imaginary friends. it was fun. Anyway keep up the good work!

very good

Enjoyed it, thank you!

A really fresh idea for a story! I always had imaginary animal friends when I was a little. (Well, I might still have one...)

haha. What an amazing concept for a short story.

Thanks for the appreciative comments.

Great story and very well written, thanks for sharing Paul Bassett Davies!

Brilliant story - I loved the idea, very interesting. I'd like to request to Staff Picks

jeff mantel ; you, much thanks; see, I mixed it up!

Great writing style as always Mike Stevens

Jenny-Rose : Thanks Jenny-Rose!

Quirky story, loved the idea of the collection of stories all centred on this toy shop. Can't wait to read more.

Hannah Marie ;Thanks Hannah!

Interesting story Mike Stevens. I really like the idea that you have made a collection of stories.

Great stream-of-consciousness story Lindsey Nicholas

Interesting characters, looking forward to more Illustrated Shorts

Great characters and descriptions in this - looking forward to the next part

Really enjoyable short. You made the wife truly detestable, I just wish we could have read what happens next.

Interesting juxtaposition Kevina Oyatedor, think you could expand on this

Thanks for sharing this and giving me something to think about.

Lovely story, Kevina Oyatedor. I enjoyed its song-like quality!

Simple and enjoyable - it works well like that. As KateDaniela says, it would be better if it was split up into poem structure.

Good job. I think definitely make it longer and maybe change the form to make it into a poem? Look forward to reading more!

Short and sweet, I enjoyed this Kevina Oyatedor.

Hannah Marie, yes, I plan to write more! In fact, I just added a bit more today.

Pia Lou , thanks for the feedback, and yes, I'll add to it!