Agreed with everything below and I can see why it was recommended. Thanks for sharing Kelson !

Great characters and point of view Kelson

A very interesting and engaging concept.

Joey T Thanks so much! Very kind of you.

Thank you, Tom Baker!

One of your best Emily Kinney, recommending for Staff Picks

Some particularly good symbolic writing in this one Emily Kinney

Sabine Shah Thank you for your encouragement! I'm glad you liked it!

A perfect little package like the one you mention in your story. Really deserved to be a staff pick. Good job.

Joey T Thank you for the suggestion... "fixed". :-)

jeff mantel Thank you for reading the piece... I appreciate the encouragement.

A few grammatical mistakes but a nice little story Jacque Stead

Alexandra Neon Thank you for the kind words, I am so pleased that you enjoyed it. Jacque

Love this genre - rare to see it but pleasant when it shows up!

Alex Hamilton Thanks, Alex!

Katrina Allardyce Thanks, Katrina. I'll take a look. Glad you liked it.

I really like reading your work. Will you be uploading any more? Brendan Carroll

Great story, really enjoyed it. Dialogue needs some fine tuning. Great stuff!

Good story, I have never thought about combining the Knights Templar with the Norse legends. Very interesting concept and well written.

Interesting conceit JD Mayrant, well executed

Nice.

I like it, so Funny, sweet and short!

Funny story, I liked it.

Hannah Marie thank you for the read and the encouraging words as always!

Hi Sunny Nayyar I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the recommendation!

Hi RJ Leek thank you for the read. I'm glad you enjoyed the story!

Lovely little piece. Really enjoyed it.

Amazing concept. I just love the story. I remember having imaginary friends. it was fun. Anyway keep up the good work!

very good

Enjoyed it, thank you!

A really fresh idea for a story! I always had imaginary animal friends when I was a little. (Well, I might still have one...)

haha. What an amazing concept for a short story.

Thanks for the appreciative comments.

Great story and very well written, thanks for sharing Paul Bassett Davies!

Brilliant story - I loved the idea, very interesting. I'd like to request to Staff Picks

It is a good piece, tapping all five senses. But the guilt part was a bit overwhelming.

Great piece, some interesting descriptions too - I liked it

Sally-Anne Wilkinson, this brings back memories (not many still in tact, mind you)...

Sally-Anne Wilkinson Some fantastic descriptive writing as always!

Amber Meyer Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it :D

RacingStarShips Not a problem my friend.

Tom Baker Thanks! I'm flattered that you think it's good enough for staff picks :)

Staff Picks

Authentic, gritty, and easy to identify with the main character, nice piece.

Ah ignore my last comment-your character likes to read encyclopedia's... :-)

RJ Leek , this was an excellent story!

I can see why this got on the front page. Thank you RJ Leek

A well-constructed character study.

Hi Christina, many thanks for your time and kind words., it's very much appreciated.

I would like to recommend this story Staff Picks .

jeff mantel Thank you very much!

Tom Baker Thank you Tom!

Great little piece snott, some nice descriptive writing

Alex Hamilton Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

Great piece, like a snap shot of life. Very well written, enjoyable read.

I like this. A lot.

Good story, very engaging. The description, however, is more or less a spoiler, and I would question this.

jeff mantel - Thank you very much, Jeff:)

Thank you, Tom Baker :)

Such a sad, but original, story Jane Turley

A really chilling ending. Thoroughly enjoyable Jane Turley !

Woah. I loved it. :) Thank you

Sabine Shah Thanks, glad you liked it.

I loved it. It painted a thousand pictures in my mind.

Thanks Sophie, it certainly is.

doceft Thank you very much. Glad you liked it.

A simply graphic, wonderful and sad piece all at once. I really enjoyed it kateannejack.

Sophie E Tallis Thanks Sophie and thanks for telling me about Readwave, great site.

Lisamarie Lamb Thanks, glad you liked it.

Oh, such a sad and sudden ending, thank you.

Sad and evocative, you know I love this kind of writing Kate. Well done!

Tom Baker Thanks so much Tom, I really appreciate your kindness.

jeff mantel Thanks, glad you liked it.

Very poignant and vivid kateannejack

Hannah Marie Thanks for your feedback, much appreciated.

Beautiful imagery kateannejack and great description. Well done.

Alex Hamilton Thanks, pleased you enjoyed it.

bethanhead Thank you, glad you liked it.

Beautifully evocative piece. Thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece.

That's a real dream that you had? Wow that must have been a shock to wake up from that! Thanks for sharing!

I really enjoyed this Ben Mears. Looking forward to more!

jeff mantel Thank you

Quite a vivid description Ben Mears

Hannah Marie Thank you very much

Christina Ar Thank you, I am thrilled you enjoyed it.

Emsy Thank you so much, for the feedback and the read

AnotherKilljoy Thank you so much, I am flattered that you enjoyed it so much.

Good work overall, but would have been even better if the morality issue was not that obvious.

Could do with a little more description to balance out the dialogue tater22

Love it!! The conversation with the two sisters kind of reminded me when one of my sister's and I argue.

Interesting story - I liked it a lot. Staff Picks maybe?

This is an extremely well written, thought provoking story, well done!

A great idea Lisa M but some of the language does seem anachronistic to me too

Thanks for sharing mbardon - this one's getting a lot of attention!

Very good mbardon

Great story mbardon. Really interesting how you add in the time travel element. Really well written.

I loved your story! Maybe Mr. Pierce should be a little more severe when he reprimands Joan? But other than that, wonderful work!

Interesting story, well written and entertaining.

Tom Baker A very, very good story Tom - eerie and immensely gripping. Well done.

Hi Tom Baker I love your story! I didn't find it too long. Looking forward to more!

Very good.

Very good description of the Norwegian landscape and the people! I really enjoyed your writing style.

oh, and a recommend for Staff Picks

This is fantastic. I can only describe it as H.P. Lovecraft written in the style of Jorge Borges.
Truly top notch material.

Excellent story. Well pieced together, from the beginning to the end. You have a talent for telling stories. Keep writing.

Thank you for making this a staff pick!

Hannah Marie Thank you, hannah for reading and taking the time to comment!

Rockin Richie B. Thank you Richie! You do, indeed, rock!

I enjoyed reading this story very much :) Your writing was believable and descriptive, and you did a very good job!

Alexandra Neon Thank you for reading, and for your feedback!

A great short! The viewpoint from the child was realistic and poignant, it complimented the situation perfectly.

I enjoyed reading this a lot, great stuff!

Wow! Excellent writing, difficult topic, great job.

I'm so freaked out by this! Very well done Sally.

Congratulations Sally-Anne Wilkinson!

Raised the hair on my neck! A chillingly introspect of a monster... short on words, big on content... Very well done!

very good job getting us to understand a character in such a short amount of time.

Interesting story, chilling and well written

I like the twisted psychology of the narrator, and it's very effective how his partner's opinion is never referred to. Love it!

Tom Baker Thanks for the feedback and the recommendation.  I appreciate the reviews a lot :)

bethanhead Thank you very much for the positive feedback.

I read this on the edge of my seat! I throroughly enjoyed it !

Old Fat Prop Thanks for the positive feedback.  Glad you didn't enjoy it ;-)